Love’s Thunderbolt
We met by serendipity
In range of Cupid’s bow
Her eyes had fire that spun me in
Gyrating vertigo.
Her love struck like a thunderbolt
It flashed somatic heat
We knew we’d spend a lifetime close
Our sweet love to accrete.
If given chance to feel again
That thunderbolt so fissile
I’d see it now in its true guise
A surface-to-air missile 😛
“Somatic” and “fissile” and “accrete”: Great word choice here.
Thank you, I learned them all reading other peoples poetry on WordPress Benjamin – it’s a great place to learn.
I agree. I’m sure I’ll learn quite a bit from your poetry.
Thank you for reading my poem,and a like star.I find this piece so very beautiful,your a true artist in poetry.
You are very kind to say so. Many thanks.
Fantastic. Romantic.
I thank you for both of your generous affirmative words Chrissy.
Funky-edgy poem. And the rhyme! Been a while since my brain danced from reading a poem. Thank you for the super cool ride. 🙂
Thank you for taking the time to make such an energetic comment on my somewhat tongue-in-cheek flash of nostalgia.
The pleasure is all mine, Sir.
A refreshing poem. Time and experience has made the poet view the ‘thunderbolt’ love in a different light:)
Thanks for you compliment nightlake. The poet doesn’t like to generalise about love but needs to laugh at himself sometimes 😀
You should stop avoiding it.. you are fantastic at it! xo
Your encouragement is timely and appreciated as ever Phoebe.
Great sense of humour 😉 I agree with your summation, although sometimes one does desire warfare!
Thanks Morgan. Especially for you, some tips for your warfare desires:
I happily let my ex take the Rav4 (I kept the Merc!).
More seriously, I think there’s a time when stuff is just ready to be written (not sure if there’s even that much conscious choice). I know there’s things I’ve yet to write about, and I’m sure it will happen one day, but for now it’s simmering. So, I really appreciate you taking on the love theme, which I enjoyed relating to – I could handle the missile heading my way, I just wish my mainframe wasn’t hacked beforehand, so that I knew when it was coming!
You’re as wise as ever dear friend which is why I enjoy your visits here and your poetry there.
Too Funny!! LOL 🙂
Dont be so harsh on yourself, I actually liked it! Thunderbolts are good, when hit at the right moment 😉
Thank you for the kind comment – and it’s always nice to hear from a Glass-Half-Full person 🙂
You certainly nailed this one down. Just a great ending! Love the humor in it, but it’s so true, isn’t it? 😉
So glad you enjoyed and took the time to let me know Tiffany.
Gyrating vertigo? Haha I could have fun with that 🙂
Sure wasn’t I thinking of you as I wrote it Claudie 😀
LOl keep em coming, always looking for new material, love the freshness of this poem. 🙂
Love it! I think it’s brilliant – tells a powerful story but also laced with humor – fabulous! 🙂
Thank you Helen – maybe I’ll treat the subject seriously some day but tongue is firmly in cheek for now 😛