ah
you,
flirting
inside my
dreams and
contemplation;
did I inveigle you
here into my mind?
maybe you’ve arrived
of your sole self-volition?
I don’t want you to be here
in this my lone peaceful place.
I will decide to ignore each your
lilac gaze, redtinge hair, thigh-slit
tanned leg, wisp waist, pliant breast,
your flesh; warm flesh; soft warm flesh.
I will not overlook your disparaging heart,
and grating teeth spitting verbal vilification,
your keen claws, ribald affair, the broken trust;
the tri-polar triangle of him, you and this naïve sap
then the serial raw malevolence of a woman scorned.
But…as you’re here now…may I please have this dance?
Fugitive Fragments
by Mike McGuire
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Reblogged this on lifestyle warbler.
I am honored by you choice of my work for this reblog Max – thank you.
Beautiful!
Thank you for saying so Lynda – greatly appreciated.
this is really really cool… and wonderful idea.. do u mind if I try your design style ?! wont copy your words I promise! 🙂
Thank you Angela, it’s kind of you to say so. I recommend that you try the style next time you’re feeling masochistic 😀 Tip: write the poem first then shape and change words to suit.
This is amazing!!!
Your words are welcome and appreciated Chloe – thank you very much.
Sharp-edged arrowhead of a poem. Literally. Sizzling xx
Piercing puns kk, lay them on thick, I love ’em 😄
Wow, Mike, that’s creative, clever you! I can never get my head round creating one of those poems, the shapes distract my writing, but that is such a good poem too!
You’re very kind Lizzie. This is a style that I think attracts me on the rare occasion when I feel like an extra challenge. From there it’s just sheer bloody-mindedness and a stubborn refusal to give up. One has to wonder if it was worth the energy. You’ll do it too when you get the same ‘urge’. Write it normally first, then mould it to fit, being prepared to make the minor changes necessary to fit. Practice Lizzie 🙂
All creativity is worth the energy! I shall give it a try Mike, I can’t imagine what shape it might to turn out!! 😀
What shape?…maybe start with a double-helix Lizzie
Haha, that would be too easy!!! 😉
It is amazing how you got the lines to fit the format. That must have taken a lot of work! And “lilac gaze.” Very nice.
A labour of love linnetmoss, coupled with a stubborn streak 🙂 Thank you so much.
This is awesome!!! Loved it ❤
This is beautiful. 🙂
Thank you Katherine, I’m pleased that you appreciated this – thank you so much for this positive feedback.
Nicely written!
I appreciate your reading and kind compliment – thank you so much.
This is awesome Mike!
Greatly done.
Hugz & Love ❤
I thank you hugely Patty for your compliment and good wishes 🙂
Oh ya baby let’s dance! Wow I like this! Wonderful presentation! ❀◕ ‿ ◕❀
Everyone loves the Tango MichelleMarie – great to watch but difficult to do. I’m glad this got you groovin’ 😀
I’ve never danced the tango. I was really kidding! That was what came to my mind so I said it! 😀
I love this presentation triangle. I was inspired by tis design of course I did not copy it but used a similar repetitive flow in an art piece I am posting. I wanted you to know you inspired this design in my mind! thank you.
This is one of the things I love about WordPress – we all pick up ideas from each other and become better writers. Go for it MichelleMarie 🙂
So there I was, deep in the moment of the poem, and came to the last line and… you got me! I mean… I totally burst out laughing! Now YOU are the flirting one, flirting with words and poems to keep your readers unsuspecting! Well done, Mike 🙂
I take I bow, my right hand in supplication, my left thrown upwards behind with extravagant panache. I thank you Christy.
Clever! And a lot of fun to read. Thanks, Mike.
Kind words, much appreciated Michele – thank you.
Reblogged this on Tales of Unwise Paths.
Very clever. It would take me a hundred years to create a poem like that. May I reblog to “Tales of Unwise Paths”?
Thank you, it almost took me that long to write it too 😀 I would be honoured to have this piece reblogged – thank you for further disseminating my work.
Many thanks. It must be quite a brain exercise – almost multi-dimensional. Even a short simple form is very difficult. To achieve a perfect form without compromising the language – I doubt if any of my other readers could match it . It is a pleasure to reblog your original piece. 🙂
What a wonderful poem in the shape of a triangle, dear Mike
I am now thinking that this could be also the shape of two tango dancers as they come closer in a sort of scissor movement with their legs
Sending you all my best wishes!. Aquileana 🙂
Your ambition is without limits Aquileana! 😀
Wow, a masterpiece! Wisp waist and flowing skirt, or a wish tree?
No, this is nature of a different sort from the the one that you document so well Tiny, and much less logical 😀 Thank you for your appreciation.
Love the ‘tri-polar triangle’ and the ‘raw malevolence of a woman scorned’ – clever concrete poem, Mike, many levels to be appreciated.
Concrete – you do come out with some really sharp analyses Polly. Thank you so much.
Ha.. how can you avoid asking for a dance.. this is just brilliant. Love the form.. (a Christmas tree?)… but it sounds a lot better with a company like this than to be alone.
Yes it takes two Björn and I must see if I can hang shiny emoticons on the tree for xmas 😀 Good of you to swing by mate, many thanks.
I appreciate the time and effort that went into this piece of art, Michael. Visually delectable. On a side note, purely observational in wonderings, I do hope she dances well. 🙂 For all that is right with the world, dance and dance well.
The protagonist in his confusion doesn’t mind how badly she dances – just that it takes two to do it. Thank you for your valued input dear Audrey Dawn.
This is so fluid and faultless Mike. I enjoyed a great deal.
A lovely compliment ezratafari, thank you very much indeed.
Wowsers, seems trite, but damnnnn I really liked that, and I quite liked the visual presentation too!
Xx Paris
Many thanks Paris, I’m glad this piece clicked with you – totally untrite, I recognize authentic appreciation when I see it 😀
Ya don’t get what ya don’t ask for, however ya ask, I Suppose. This is definitely one way to go about it. I’d be too hypnotized by a lilac gaze to wax quite so poetic, (not to mention the presence of tanned legs and pliant breasts). I guess that’s why I sit so many numbers out, eh?
I hear you Ron but when I count the number of times that opportunity is inclined to knock I’m only too happy to trip the light fantastic when it shines across my path 😀
You know in my mind, Mike, the form of this poem takes the shape of a Christmas tree.
When you were talking about a “sap husband”, I was thinking maybe this was indeed the form you intended the poem to take.
But after reading it again, I think not.
Of course, Freud and Jung might wonder if your subconscious Christmas wish is to engage in a steamy and hot tango with a steamy and hot Latina dancer.
Hence the shape of the poem.
I sincerely hope Santa is reading your interpretation DVH 😀
Impressive Mike! 🙂
This is very generous of you C – many thanks 🙂
A pointed observation on the politics of dancing 🙂
This comment enters the Top Ten in my personal Hall of Fame Jackie. Congratulations and thank you 😀
You could definitely tango to that! Hot latin blood and all. Bravo, Mike.
I’m delighted that this piece has gotten you into the spirit of the theme! Thanks Michael.
Immaculate.
Did one of these in the shape of a rhombus coupla years back. Might now have to dig it out. The gauntlet is down.
Were she mortally sleepy,
Your teepee’d fit Nefertiti.
The marriage of mathematics and poetry is a domain for the demented Slayer but those of us who do it deserve the opportunity of showcasing our dorky persistence 👀.
Go for it man 😄
Happy New Year, Mike.
Here it is:
http://oliverhutton.wordpress.com/2014/12/14/cell-fish-12/
Wow wow this is excellent! Visual as well as rhythmic.
Such an encouraging comment! Thank you so much Sonya.
So beautiful, I just wish the 5th line reads : “Contemplating” or its conjunction “and” will change to “in” to complete the succeeding noun, but validity is all. It’s really a nice piece.
Thank you for your kind words amoafowaa. Your grammatical advice is absolutely correct – that particular line proved beyond my capabilities for compliance with the laws of language and geometry at the same time 😀
obviously a Christmas dance…
🎹 That’s The Jingle-Bell Rock kiwiskan 🎼 😄
What goes on inside the head is often unspeakable and often best unspoken but here it sounds right, almost essential, an imperative. This, for me, is a catharsis and the dramatic intensity is impressive. Kudos, Mike!
Astute observation and intuition John. I wrote to reflect the quixotic confusion that immediately follows such a scenario, the time when nothing and everything is real. I consider your analysis and comment to be an accreditation that enhances this work. Much thanks.
Love this.
I glad you got this georgetteann, thanks so much for your affirmation.
Brilliant, Mike. Just wow. Waiting for my son’s hockey game to start and this blew my mind. Had to tell you!! Kudos.
It is an honour to have filled such a highly anticipatory moment in your family day Chrissy, in fact you’ve made me feel quite special – thank you.
You’re welcome!!! Xo